Critique time
3.75-4/5
Positives – I like the setting as well as the fact that the ancestors doesn’t care for how her descendants do things. Half dragon is good and how he’s still very young for a half dragon shows.
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Negatives – honestly I only have 3 things that detracted from the score, the pacing, the geography, and the time difference. Pacing is kinda non existent, we’ve been given next to no information about the geography of this places other than knowing that we’re 3000km south now or something, lastly 150 years (think that’s how long it’s been) isn’t enough time for who the ancestor really was to have been forgotten like this. She’s basically the girls great(2 or 3 times) grandmother.
@Karma95 disguise magic done by Walika, making her look even more convincing as his daughter i believe. Now she’s home, there’s no need to hide that hair color
I enjoy the unique take of the original not just disappearing, but on top of that to be shown such kindness by the possessor to make her life as good as possible and give it back, so sweet!! Anyone have recommendations like this one? I love it!
nemuri13
I agree with Solomon3212 this concept is interesting but the pacing is indeed not the best
Solomon3212
Critique time
3.75-4/5
Positives – I like the setting as well as the fact that the ancestors doesn’t care for how her descendants do things. Half dragon is good and how he’s still very young for a half dragon shows.
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Negatives – honestly I only have 3 things that detracted from the score, the pacing, the geography, and the time difference. Pacing is kinda non existent, we’ve been given next to no information about the geography of this places other than knowing that we’re 3000km south now or something, lastly 150 years (think that’s how long it’s been) isn’t enough time for who the ancestor really was to have been forgotten like this. She’s basically the girls great(2 or 3 times) grandmother.
solarisa
@Karma95 disguise magic done by Walika, making her look even more convincing as his daughter i believe. Now she’s home, there’s no need to hide that hair color
Karma95
Wait why was her hair black in the previous and now it’s not?
Boomtastic
I enjoy the unique take of the original not just disappearing, but on top of that to be shown such kindness by the possessor to make her life as good as possible and give it back, so sweet!! Anyone have recommendations like this one? I love it!